I looked up this book on Amazon and read its preview. It's been improved by quite a bit since this post (wonder if Quigley actually read your review). Among other things, the chapter you quoted from is now Chapter 3, the story is now in first-person present tense (that major POV error is gone), the repetitive sentences are gone, and "toilet" has been changed to "outhouse" (although "my delicate body" remains).
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I looked up this book on Amazon and read its preview. It's been improved by quite a bit since this post (wonder if Quigley actually read your review). Among other things, the chapter you quoted from is now Chapter 3, the story is now in first-person present tense (that major POV error is gone), the repetitive sentences are gone, and "toilet" has been changed to "outhouse" (although "my delicate body" remains).