ext_50177 ([identity profile] fpb.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] inverarity 2010-07-25 08:55 am (UTC)

I see at least three howlingly bad stylistic errors and one grammatical error in the above two sentences. How about you?
One could probably write a couple of paragraphs about them, possibly more. The badness builds, and so do the reflections on the various things that are wrong with, well, grammar, syntax, pacing, variation, imagery, way of observing and describing, implicit attitude... Pity I am busy with a couple of articles on other matters.
Back in about 1981, an older friend called Adrian Holmes subjected a comic script of mine to the most savage dissection I have ever suffered. And I had to recognize that he was right. I don't claim to be an especially good writer, but it is clear to me that this person never met Adrian.

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