*squees* I can't believe you're going to leave us hanging like this! Hopefully we will find out in the actual book what Innocence saw.
What I love the most about this is the care you take with all of the characters. I don't know if you have Mr. Pritchard in any other scenes, but you obviously have him fully drawn in your head and are able to bring him across as a complete person in just a few sentences here.
Also once again, all the little whimsical details like the candy bubbles and the children's rhyme completely enchant me and draw me into your world.
I also enjoy all the names, especially Done, which conjures up the image of a perpetually frazzled, put-upon woman who has had it up to here with having kids. (And perhaps tellingly is absent from this narrative.)
Thanks so much for sharing this, and I heartily agree that if any more scenes force their way out onto your keyboard, that you not hesitate in sharing them!
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Date: 2010-08-30 07:08 am (UTC)What I love the most about this is the care you take with all of the characters. I don't know if you have Mr. Pritchard in any other scenes, but you obviously have him fully drawn in your head and are able to bring him across as a complete person in just a few sentences here.
Also once again, all the little whimsical details like the candy bubbles and the children's rhyme completely enchant me and draw me into your world.
I also enjoy all the names, especially Done, which conjures up the image of a perpetually frazzled, put-upon woman who has had it up to here with having kids. (And perhaps tellingly is absent from this narrative.)
Thanks so much for sharing this, and I heartily agree that if any more scenes force their way out onto your keyboard, that you not hesitate in sharing them!