AQATSA Update: Good News, Bad News
Apr. 10th, 2011 10:09 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png)
Current word count: 204K, 32 chapters.
Book four is obviously swelling in size to become the largest book yet in the series. I've just finished the second of three major acts, and have been chewing on how to pull off the third act for months now. Alexandra is, as you may gathered, doing a bit of traveling in this book, and originally, I planned to have her spend a lot of time in one non-Charmbridge location, and then spend a lot of time in another non-Charmbridge location for the climax.
For various reasons, the transition just was not working in my head, and I could not figure out how to execute the scenes and specific events I had in mind. Moreover, the more I thought about it, the more I felt that the book was going to be just too sprawling and unevenly paced -- almost as if I were putting two separate storylines in one book.
So, the bottom line is I've pretty much decided that that second major arc does not belong in book four. It will get pushed back to book five.
This is good news in that, theoretically, it means book four will be less bloated. (And finished sooner! :)) I don't think AQATSA would come in under 300K words if I continued with my original plan.
It's bad news in that not only do I have to rethink a few things, but the book as I planned it has structural problems, so some stuff I've written will need to be scrapped.
Overall, I feel good about making these changes, but there are still an awful lot of plot points (both for this book, and laying the foundations for the rest of the series) that I'm struggling with, and I still have recurring "I've just written 5,000 words of crap" feelings.
Also -- there are a lot of multi-page conversations. I think there is more dialog in this book than in any of the previous ones. Since I haven't yet gone back to reread it all, I'm not sure what this will do to the pacing. It's just another thing I'm fretting about... am I bogging the whole story down with too much talking, not enough action? Fret fret fret...
Character Sketches
Here are the final character sketches based on the roughs I posted a few days ago.
Overall, I like them. To be perfectly honest, though, I think the rough sketches were somewhat better representations. Everyone seems to have aged a few years in the inked versions, and Anna's picked up some extra weight around her face. Still, I'm very happy with the artist's work. (She does seem to like drawing large feet, though!)




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Date: 2011-04-11 06:34 am (UTC)You are damn right about all characters having aged. David is definitely an adult - and in training for basketball to boot - and so are the Pritchards. The rule is simple: commonplace proportion, five or six heads tall; imposing proportion, six or seven heads; heroic, seven or eight; improbable - and only to be used for special effects, such as Galactus in FF#50 - nine or ten heads. David looks at least seven heads tall, and it's not just the feet - which I had already noticed last time - his whole legs are massive. I am surprised, since I thought this artist had a better understanding of human variety and age than that.
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Date: 2011-04-11 08:23 am (UTC)I am not bothered by the large feet, though, since feet do grow earlier than the rest of the body, and also the sketches are clearly from a ground perspective.
Alex' clothing also seems a little excessively muggleish for me. When I imagine pants as art of the Charmbridge code, I think of more dressy, wider pants, and then you have those sneakers ... Bu what I find most dissonant is her vest.
Unless ... she is purposefully being drawn in muggle attire, because she is right then in a muggle area.
--Geneva
Re: the sketches
Date: 2011-04-11 09:37 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2011-04-11 12:45 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2011-04-11 09:33 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2011-04-11 01:54 pm (UTC)Maybe you could post the cut scenes here eventually (= when there's no danger of spoiling book 4or 5 anymore)?
If so, I'm confident you'll catch it in the edditing round. Most likely it's much better than you think, though.
And yes, they all look about 18 to me now ... except for Constance and Forbearance who may be closer to 30. David looks really good like this, though.
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Date: 2011-04-12 06:23 am (UTC)Seconded.
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Date: 2011-04-11 09:01 pm (UTC)As long as you don't pull a George RR Martin...:p
Also -- there are a lot of multi-page conversations. I think there is more dialog in this book than in any of the previous ones. Since I haven't yet gone back to reread it all, I'm not sure what this will do to the pacing. It's just another thing I'm fretting about... am I bogging the whole story down with too much talking, not enough action?
Conversations are interesting things. In TV shows and movies, they can't be too long, and even then you need to have the characters do something while talking (hence the famous "Walk and Talk" [http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/WalkAndTalk]). In a book, though, you tend to have a lot more latitude. As long as the talking furthers the plot and/or gives more insight into the characters, it's probably not an issue as long as you don't go way overboard.
-TealTerror
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Date: 2011-04-12 06:20 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2011-04-12 08:25 am (UTC)The main issue I can see in using conversations to advance plot and/or character is if they get too far into "tell, don't show" territory. For example, a lot of people complain that Dumbledore always explains the plot at the end of each Harry Potter book--and while I actually disagree, I can see where they're coming from. That said, if you do it right, it's definitely fully within the realm of possibility to "show" with conversation.
Using dialogue as a climax also has a long and venerable tradition, and definitely shouldn't be shied away from if it fits the story.
As to Tolkein: I don't like Lord of the Rings, as literature, as much as you do (I definitely fully appreciate its historical value). That said, I did actually highly enjoy the Council of Elrond scene. Although I would suggest that Tolkein wasn't entirely successful at hiding the fact that he was info-dumping in it, the info being dumped was at least interesting enough to carry the scene along.
-TealTerror
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Date: 2011-04-12 11:32 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2011-04-13 08:34 am (UTC)There are, of course, many ways to make your conversations flow with the overall story. Tolkein's method is one of them, but I think it's probably easier to use it epic fantasy than in low fantasy or other genres. In any case, I still think that in text, most readers are willing to sit through a great deal of dialogue as long as it's interesting.
-TealTerror
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Date: 2011-04-12 03:16 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2011-04-18 04:34 am (UTC)"...I still have recurring "I've just written 5,000 words of crap" feelings"
Inverarity, I can say with total honesty that you really could not post crap. It will all be excellent in the end, I'm certain.